陳傳光

This years summer holiday was the most unforgettable. I spent fifteen days at my grandparents home in the countryside.

Every morning， I went to the field to help my grandparents do farm work after have① breakfast. I learned a lot of agricultural knowledge from them. In the afternoon， I usually spent most of my time on the hill. My new friends and I ran after each other， picked fresh fruits and catch② butterflies together. There was always so many③ fun.

Sometimes I went to swim in the river in the village. The water in it was quite clear. In the evening， I often helped the little kids in the neighborhood at④ their lessons. I was patient but strict with them， just liked a real teacher. Now， I really miss them very much. I hope I could go back there again next summer holiday.

江蘇省連云港市贛榆區(qū)羅陽(yáng)中學(xué)八（1）班 王冬冬

1. 優(yōu)點(diǎn)：

本文是一篇記敘文。小作者回憶自己在祖父母家里過(guò)暑假的難忘經(jīng)歷。文章按照時(shí)間順序，描述了她豐富多彩的鄉(xiāng)下生活，并表達(dá)對(duì)農(nóng)村生活的熱愛(ài)。整篇文章文字流暢、用詞得當(dāng)，是一篇不錯(cuò)的學(xué)生習(xí)作。

2. 需要修改的地方：

① have改為having。after是介詞，介詞后接動(dòng)詞的-ing形式；

② catch改為caught。結(jié)合上下文，此處應(yīng)使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)；

③ many改為much。many只能修飾可數(shù)名詞的復(fù)數(shù)，much只能修飾不可數(shù)名詞，fun是不可數(shù)名詞；

④ at改為with。help sb. with sth.是固定結(jié)構(gòu)，意為“在某方面幫助某人”。

3. 評(píng)分：

按江蘇省連云港市中考英語(yǔ)作文滿(mǎn)分25分的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，本文修改前可得23分。