陳珮琪

As a saying goes， “East， west， home is the best”. Ive been to many places， but I think my hometown is the most wonderful. Now let me introduce it to you.

Harbin is the beautiful city which I was born in. It is famous for ice and snow in the world. Its called “Ice City”. Every winter many visitors around the world come here to visit the Ice and Snow World. There are also many places of interest to visit， such as the Central Street， the Sun Island and so on. You can enjoy a lot of delicious food as well， like Harbin sausages and Harbin Beer. If you have a chance to be here， I believe youll like it.

I love my hometown！ People here are very friendly and helpful. Welcome to my hometown！

【簡評】文章開頭引用名人名言、吸引讀者，具有較強(qiáng)的說服力，更能有力地表達(dá)作者的觀點。

小作者以輕松愉快的語氣，向我們娓娓道來她的家鄉(xiāng)——美麗的哈爾濱。并將家鄉(xiāng)的特色寫得細(xì)致入微，更顯自然親切。敘述自然生動、結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，銜接自然連貫，中心突出。

文章最后揭示中心句，實屬點晴之筆，概括之語，短促而有力。

指導(dǎo)教師：宗杰