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Dont you think it is really interesting to travel with our family？ Among all the ways of travelling， I like taking a train best. Last week， I had a chance to visit Dalian with my parents by train. It is a fantastic journey.

That was a sunny day. Happily， I got on the train to Dalian. It was really interesting to travel by train. There were so many interesting things to look at outside the window the sea， the mountains and many patches of green. What a beautiful picture！I made a friend with a girl in the train. We have the same hobby， reading books. And we talked a lot about books， which made the journey full of laugh and happiness. With a sleeper ticket， I slept in a bed at night and had a sweet dream. How time flies！ Shortly after waking up， we arrived in Dalian. Indeed， I spent a happy and unforgettable time in the train.

What an interesting journey！ Ill never forget it.

【簡(jiǎn)評(píng)】本文描述了一次難忘的火車之旅，全文洋溢著歡快的氣氛。這種快樂(lè)的感情通過(guò)對(duì)天氣、景色和活動(dòng)的描寫表現(xiàn)出來(lái)。小作者運(yùn)用了多樣的句式，如感嘆句、反問(wèn)句等，并將長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合使用，使文章更加具有可讀性。文章段落清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)合理，展示了小作者的英語(yǔ)寫作功底。