吳迪

March 12th is the Tree Planting Day. All the students of our Class went to plant trees by the Yellow River.

It was a fine day. We got to the school gate before 8：00 to start out together by bike. It took about forty minutes to reach the place by the Yellow River. We were all in comfortable clothes and strong shoes with spades， barrels. All the boys and girls were excited when they got there.

We began to work. The boys dug holes and the girls carried water. We worked very hard and planted about 300 trees. Though we were tired， we felt very happy！

簡(jiǎn)評(píng)：本文是一篇記敘文，要求寫發(fā)生過的事情。小作者運(yùn)用了過去時(shí)態(tài)，選取了每年一次的植樹活動(dòng)作為描寫對(duì)象，對(duì)活動(dòng)加了些想象，如天氣狀況、騎自行車去植樹、男生女生的分工等細(xì)節(jié)充實(shí)到作文里，讓作文豐滿形象，富有感染力！尤其是結(jié)尾處的though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句的使用，欲揚(yáng)先抑， 寫出了感受。不足之處是如能談到植樹的作用會(huì)使文章增色不少。

（指導(dǎo)教師： 孫全生）