假如你在武漢一個中學(xué)讀書。你校準(zhǔn)備在“五一”節(jié)邀請the Beatles樂隊到你們學(xué)校舉行音樂晚會,歡度“五一”節(jié)。請你以學(xué)校的名義寫一則英語海報,告知全校師生,內(nèi)容包括以下要點:
1、 時間:5月1日晚上8點;
2、地點:學(xué)校音樂廳;
3、對the Beatles樂隊略作介紹;
4、座位有限,請?zhí)崆坝單?,?lián)系電話:86698669。
要求:根據(jù)中文提示,要求語句通順,書寫規(guī)范。中文提示要點不要逐句翻譯。字?jǐn)?shù)80詞左右,開頭結(jié)尾部分已給出,不計入總詞數(shù)。
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Dear students and teachers,
No. 1 Middle School
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Dear students and teachers,
The Beatles is invited by our school and is going to give a concert on May 1st in our school music hall①. The Beatles is from UK. It’s very popular in the world. It has made many songs that many Chinese students are interested②. The seats are not many③. Please book your seat ahead of time when④ you want to come. The telephone number is 86698669 and you can call us any time. The concert begins at eight o’clock in the evening. We hope that you will come in time and celebrate May Day with us.
No. 1 Middle School
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本文作者詳細(xì)地介紹了The Beatles樂隊的情況,語言簡練,語句通順流暢。但出現(xiàn)了幾處錯誤或不妥,如:
① 應(yīng)當(dāng)是地點狀語在前,時間狀語在后,改為“in our school music hall on May 1st”;
② “be interested in”為固定短語,這里缺少介詞in;
③ 此處使用了漢語表達(dá)式,應(yīng)改為“There are not many seats in the hall”;
④ 連詞使用不當(dāng),根據(jù)句意,此處應(yīng)用if,表條件“如果”;
同學(xué)們應(yīng)該通過閱讀教師的點評,仔細(xì)品味和總結(jié)怎樣去提高自己的寫作水平。(得分:12分,滿分:15分)